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   So, uhm, I'd like to talk about myself, then. Uhm, this is awkward, haha! Alrightee. Well, I'm supposed to be recordin' these stories of mine. This is my story, or, er, I mean, this is...me. So, my friend, Paul, he's a professor, see-I mean, he was. He says I should be recordin' my stories, somethin' about passin' them on...I just hope to God I sent this back to the right time..


   I'm five foot ten inches and slender as can be, one hundred twenty five pounds. Alrightee, yeah, I know I'm sickly skinny, but we're all starving here okay? Well...I mean, we're alive, but it ain't comfortable here...you know? So, I have bright red hair, I mean vivid. It's dyed, with blonde highlights, 'cos that's my natural colour. My eyes are real ice blue, with darker blue rims, like a husky-dog's. I'm really, real, pale, with cheekbones like razorblades.


   Oh, you mighta noticed, I have a British kinda accent and way of speaking, (that is, if you can hear this tape, and I didn't send it back to the wrong time, in which case you'd just kinda be sittin' there starin' at this little box wondering what it's gonna do.) but that's 'cos I'm from there. Moved to Manhattan Chase when I was...Uh...I dunno. Seventeen? Twenty-five, now. So, accent's kinda gone. But, aaaaaanyways. So, I always wear an eyepatch over my right eye, 'cos when I was a kid, some piece of metal damaged it badly. I mean, I can see, but not too well, so I figger it's better to just tell 'em I don't got one, then explain.


  I wear crazy-lookin' clothes, 'cos we have to make our own, and I like coloured and patterned clothes, so...I wear 'em. My favourite outfit is red pants tucked into black boots, red suspenders, a blue and green patterned shirt and matching neck-tie-kerchief thing. Sounds kinda matchy-matchy or bad, but it's alrightee. I like it. I apparently have 'good leadership skills', and I'm real quick-like, fast-like, and I'm pretty strong for being this Goddarn small. People say I'm smart, wry, spry, an' all that...But I think it's just because they like too follow someone, and for right now, well, that's me. Crrrrrck! Sorry, that was a pan falling. I'm doing this while I'm tryin' to fix something small to eat. So, I like to play guitar, and I can sing...I love to paint, but all I can really paint is negative-like stuff, you know? I mean, your surroundings are supposed to be your inspiration, like, and if you're surrounded by all this, well...Things are gonna get nasty.

   But, so, if you're listenin', I imagine you're wanting to know...what is going on now. Eeeeeaaaaah! Oh, God...Oh, God, I'm sorry 'bout that. Some, uh, nasty pests 'round here. 'Specially in the food. Aaaanyways. So, I dunno what year it is...All I know is it's thirty or forty years after 'The Disaster', as they're all callin' it now-abouts. 'The Disaster'...Still, no one knows what it was. So, the government has joined together, uh, done a world-wide alliance thing, callin' itsself 'Father'. Sound like a science fiction novel, eh? Haha. No one knows why they did that. But, so, one day, they announced that there was this war. With who, no one had an idea. I mean, there was no one else to fight against. But, they kept draftin' people for this war. People-iiioooodsss...were gettin' curious, mad, like, but 'Father' just kept going for people. Then, one day, they just said, 'It's coming.' So, they had everyone evacuate cities, people going from anywhere to these safe 'camps' 'Father' had. Well, everyone but the rebels, that's like my mum and da, they stayed behind. Well, soon enough, everyone...Just, uh, disappeared. The government, those 'soldiers', the people that as evacuated and left...just gone. Only the rebels were left. I was born, then, while after that. So, no one remembers the years...If you're listenin', it could be tomorrow, or next week, for you. Or your birthday. Or your Mum's. I dunno, I don't remember. So, please, listen maybe, if this comes in time, someone'll stop it all. I hope to God that I sent this to the right time...I have to go, now. Signing off, then.
Chh-zzzzzbt.
Here we are. Part 1, prologue of the novel I've decided to start! LOL Post-apocalyptic Manhattan Chase. Inspiration? Diamond Dogs-David Bowie. I know. Yes, some things will be taken from it. THAT IS INTENDED. LOL Thanks for reading please comment!

And, for those of you who LOVE the preview picture as much as I do and are curious about it, that Is Jack, Oscar and Maggie, a gorgeous representation done by Ms. Silvermoon822, ~silvermoon822, my dA sister, and one of my art heroes!!!
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ElegantFaith Featured By Owner Feb 11, 2012   Writer
I stumbled upon this from here (did you know you were featured?) and I'm really glad I did! This is such a cool way to start a story. Your character is very real too...with the way he was cooking while recording and all xD
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
No, wow, I didn't know!!! Thank you so, so very much, my darling, I appreciate it. Please, there are 3 other chapters up right now, and I'm working on the 4th. Please, check it out, if you like!
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Critique: (Sorry it's late :p) Maybe at the beginning put something in there before he starts talking letting people know he's recording. At first I thought he was just telling a story. It was clarified a little later, but it would be helpful for the readers for you to clarify immediately. Maybe do the little sound or something. I don't know :p Just a suggestion. Everything else is perfect :) I feel like you did an amazing job with the personality and such :heart: I loved this and I really can't wait to read more about Jack :D
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Alrightee, no, no, that's good</>, you have good grounds. Alright, I will! Thanks!
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay :) you're welcome :heart:
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
I just love the way you write... *envies* :love: This is great. :D

Quick question... is Bowie gay? :giggle:
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
OMFG! Thanks SO much! LOL

*is apalled in a silly sort of way* NO! He's comfortably straight. Why?
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
You're very welcome. :D

Oh, I saw a book about him at the bookstore yesterday, and there was a quote from him in it that said: "I'm gay, I've always been, even when I was David Jones." (I DIDN'T KNOW HIS LAST NAME WAS JONES!:XD:)
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
^^
PFFFFFFFT! I love it. LOLOLOLOLOL David! He said that when he was in his Ziggy Stardust, pushing the boundaries thing. So, he's not really gay, he said so to get a REACTION. At first he said he was bi, then gay, then bi again, then in the early 80's, he was like, "Just kidding guys, I was just looking for a reaction."
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
Wow... :XD: He's awesome, then. I love it when guys can kid about their sexuality. :D
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know, right? It's so cute. They're like, so comfortable with their straightness they can act gay. LOL
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Mercury-the-Queen Featured By Owner Jan 8, 2012
It's beautiful. :giggle:
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I know, makes me wanna eat 'em up!
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Tigrantia Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Moved to Canada at 6, am now 14, AND IS MY ACCENT GONE?? :T Notice, same number of years!
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Huh, good point. However, since people adapt, and there are an amalgamation of people there it is very likely that his accent has faded. He now has a mix of British, New York, and Southern. Just 'cos he does. LOL
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Tigrantia Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Just cos he does.... That sounds more real.
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL And, you know, your accent is hard to lose because it's from a LANGUAGE that you can still speak. It's easier to lose it if it's just an accent.
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Tigrantia Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
UNFAIRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRR
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Hahaha, why? D'you wanna lose yours?
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011
Eeeeeee have aliens invaded? :fear:
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
LOL I dunno, haaaaave they? You'll have to read, I can't reveal it!
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011
:giggle: otay
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
LOLOL Oh yeah, READ, babay! XD I'm actually looking for a copy of George Orwell's 1984 to read.
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 6, 2012
Nice! I've seen some clips from the movie on youtube before...I'm not sure what it's about, though :P.
I like John Hurt.
He's a great actor ^^.
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, I didn't know there wass a movie, I'll have to look at that. I love the book, it's actually my favourite. I'm not sure I know John Hurt, I recognise the name, but not much more. What's he in?
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MandyMullins2 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012
Yep! 1984's a movie....what's the book about?

I love John Hurt! He's played two of my favorite people, Joseph Merrick (called John in the movie) and Quentin Crisp!
Both of these people I discovered through these movies too! XD
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Well, the book is...LOL Here. I'll hit all the crucial points. XD

BTW THIS WHOLE THING IS LIKE, SPOIL CENTRAL.
Winston Smith is a low-ranking member of the ruling Party in London, in the nation of Oceania. Everywhere Winston goes, even his own home, the Party watches him through telescreens; everywhere he looks he sees the face of the Party’s seemingly omniscient leader, a figure known only as Big Brother. The Party controls everything in Oceania, even the people’s history and language. Currently, the Party is forcing the implementation of an invented language called Newspeak, which attempts to prevent political rebellion by eliminating all words related to it. Even thinking rebellious thoughts is illegal. Such thoughtcrime is, in fact, the worst of all crimes.

As the novel opens, Winston feels frustrated by the oppression and rigid control of the Party, which prohibits free thought, sex, and any expression of individuality. Winston dislikes the party and has illegally purchased a diary in which to write his criminal thoughts. He has also become fixated on a powerful Party member named O’Brien, whom Winston believes is a secret member of the Brotherhood—the mysterious, legendary group that works to overthrow the Party.

Winston works in the Ministry of Truth, where he alters historical records to fit the needs of the Party. He notices a coworker, a beautiful dark-haired girl, staring at him, and worries that she is an informant who will turn him in for his thoughtcrime. He is troubled by the Party’s control of history: the Party claims that Oceania has always been allied with Eastasia in a war against Eurasia, but Winston seems to recall a time when this was not true. The Party also claims that Emmanuel Goldstein, the alleged leader of the Brotherhood, is the most dangerous man alive, but this does not seem plausible to Winston. Winston spends his evenings wandering through the poorest neighborhoods in London, where the proletarians, or proles, live squalid lives, relatively free of Party monitoring.

One day, Winston receives a note from the dark-haired girl that reads “I love you.” She tells him her name, Julia, and they begin a covert affair, always on the lookout for signs of Party monitoring. Eventually they rent a room above the secondhand store in the prole district where Winston bought the diary. This relationship lasts for some time. Winston is sure that they will be caught and punished sooner or later (the fatalistic Winston knows that he has been doomed since he wrote his first diary entry), while Julia is more pragmatic and optimistic. As Winston’s affair with Julia progresses, his hatred for the Party grows more and more intense. At last, he receives the message that he has been waiting for: O’Brien wants to see him.

Winston and Julia travel to O’Brien’s luxurious apartment. As a member of the powerful Inner Party (Winston belongs to the Outer Party), O’Brien leads a life of luxury that Winston can only imagine. O’Brien confirms to Winston and Julia that, like them, he hates the Party, and says that he works against it as a member of the Brotherhood. He indoctrinates Winston and Julia into the Brotherhood, and gives Winston a copy of Emmanuel Goldstein’s book, the manifesto of the Brotherhood. Winston reads the book—an amalgam of several forms of class-based twentieth-century social theory—to Julia in the room above the store. Suddenly, soldiers barge in and seize them. Mr. Charrington, the proprietor of the store, is revealed as having been a member of the Thought Police all along.

Torn away from Julia and taken to a place called the Ministry of Love, Winston finds that O’Brien, too, is a Party spy who simply pretended to be a member of the Brotherhood in order to trap Winston into committing an open act of rebellion against the Party. O’Brien spends months torturing and brainwashing Winston, who struggles to resist. At last, O’Brien sends him to the dreaded Room 101, the final destination for anyone who opposes the Party. Here, O’Brien tells Winston that he will be forced to confront his worst fear. Throughout the novel, Winston has had recurring nightmares about rats; O’Brien now straps a cage full of rats onto Winston’s head and prepares to allow the rats to eat his face. Winston snaps, pleading with O’Brien to do it to Julia, not to him.

Giving up Julia is what O’Brien wanted from Winston all along. His spirit broken, Winston is released to the outside world. He meets Julia but no longer feels anything for her. He has accepted the Party entirely and has learned to love Big Brother.


That's it in a nutshell. It made me laugh, cry, gasp, everything, I LOVE IT!

Oh, neat!!! I'll def look him up then.
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Love the way this is written! :D Very interesting, I hope you continue!
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Ooh, thank you so very much!!! I'm writing the first chapter now. My Mum and sister said theey didn't really like it, that they thought it was disjointed, unclear and stuff...Is that what you thought?
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Some of it I was a little confused but I'm sure it will be cleared up in the first chapter :) I can properly critique it on Monday if you want. I'm on my phone for the weekend though :/
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
Pshrt, okay, good, then. I think it was cleared up, some, thank you! You know, that would be FANTASTIC, if you could do that for me? I try to tailor my stories to what makes sense and what people read, it'd be GRAND tohave your full feelings. Thank you so much.
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Dec 31, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You're very welcome :) Sorry I can't do it sooner:/ I'll also have to read your first chapter on Monday haha I hate being away from my computer :(
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MidnaofTwilight3519 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Oh, no, no, no, it's perfectly fine!!! I can wait.It's okay, really.
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LittleFishPenguin95 Featured By Owner Jan 1, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Okay :)
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